There is a new fad in town: Chubs! The Amazing Pet Chubs kits have been selling left and right, and all thanks to one ad in the newspaper. But now, the Amazing Pet Chubs advertisements are getting amped up: Reunited Dumplings Co. is looking for spots on T.V. commercial schedules to air the new commercial.
Nickolodeon, Disney and Cartoon Network: we want you to air the ad on your television channels. We want a channel that attracts children, because Amazing Pet Chubs are specially made for children who want a pet and want to try something new and interesting, and your channels are the most watched by children of ages 4-10. Reunited Dumplings Co. will pay 10% of the profit made (while the commercial is on the air) to the channel which signs the contract first, and 5% and 3% to the third and second channels. Don't wait, get the Amazing Pet Chubs commercial on air now by calling 732-287-0847.
Great job Alisa! I enjoyed reading your post and it was a good way to persuade your broadcaster. One major aspect of this post, that I couldn't understand was what you are selling. You described what the product is, but I though you were supposed to write about what we are doing an advertisement on. Still it was a great post except for the fact that many people do not know what chubs are. They may know because of the Chubs' popularity, but still. Anyway, I like how you divided that shares, and offered the most profit to the first company to accept your offer. Anyway, it was a good post and Ican't wait to see your advertisement on the Figeuroa News Channel.
ReplyDeleteAlisa, this was a very good post and im looking foward to buying some chubs!!! I was intrigued how you used chub as a fad, which was what we were learning about on an open ended. You seemed to show how popular this was and included good details. However, You did not show what chubs are. Over good job.
ReplyDeleteGood job, ALisa. This was a good post. I like how you made the chubs look like a link. It was prudent that you gave a good percentage of the profits to the first to give you a spot and decreased by a lot as you went down. Weren't you doing the smart phone? What exactly are they. This wasn't made clear. Maybe they did. It was good how you appealed to the shows. You said they were popular. Shows like when you compliment them. They are the opposite of humble. I know this is only one post, but in real life you might want to adress them seperatly because they most likely are in competition. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteGood post, Alisa. I liked how you explained why your commercial should be on TV. Chubs are an interesting product; no one else advertised them. One way you can improve this piece is by making it a little bit longer. And also one spelling mistake. Overall, great job.
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